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Post by tesseracta on Jun 8, 2010 20:31:29 GMT -5
With reluctant shyness, and against my better judgment, I invite you read my legacy in progress - The Chagall Legacy. This link will take you to the chapter links: tesseracta.wordpress.com/chagallchapterlinks/It is a plot-type legacy, focusing on World Adventures for now. It is kind of wordy. : / Much of the action is true to the game, but there is a fabricated ongoing story arc for the first generation, and a few staged screenshots. I hope this is okay. This is my very first attempt at this, and I would gratefully welcome any suggestions, advice, or constructive criticism. I definitely need it. Kind regards, Tess
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Post by mdpthatsme on Jun 10, 2010 14:24:09 GMT -5
Hmmm, I like mysteries for a good read every now and then. You're doing great keeping me on my toes so far. It is very well written and you take some great photos that's for sure. Keep it up. I look forward to some more of your work.
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Post by tesseracta on Jun 11, 2010 16:44:15 GMT -5
Thanks for checking it out, mdpthatsme. : ) It's pretty intimidating to be putting stuff up here around so much great work. I'm slowly catching up on everyone's stories. Nonetheless, I'm plugging along, and I had a few days off from work this week. This gave me enough time able to write a new chapter! Here is a link! Chapter 10: Jackson is rejected, accepted, and tempted
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Post by Stacy on Jun 11, 2010 21:55:05 GMT -5
I am starting to read it now. First, omg - I LOVE YOUR HEADER IMAGE!!!! I like the dream Jackson has in the first chapter. Just added you to my blogroll. And ooh - you're the first legacy alphabetically. Can't steer as much traffic your way as I used to be able to though, sorry. And the visions continue to be FREAKING AWESOME! Ooh, romantic angst! I always love that. Am caught up. You should not feel intimidated to post this here. It's entertaining and well-written and I love it, so there.
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Post by moondaisy on Jun 14, 2010 11:35:12 GMT -5
Hi Tess, I've just read all the chapters you've written so far and commented on your blog. You have nothing to be shy about. It's wonderful. I've enjoyed this read from beginning to end, but I must congratulate you on improving dramatically with every new chapter. You now have the right balance between words and picures. Your text always flowed smoothly, but now it is witty and dynamic. The dialogues are sparkling and you have lovely shots! I love the way you build up the relationship between JC and Pauline over time. She makes me smile, he makes me think. They are a great team. I'm with Stacy that it is the most extraordinary header image. Well done, Tess! You have a lot of talent!!! P.S. I've added you to the blogroll of Moondaisy's Sim Challenges, because Atozee's is dedicated to WYD only. I really hope that you get traffic that way. You deserve it!
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Post by mdpthatsme on Jun 15, 2010 12:30:33 GMT -5
I've added you to my links as well. Just read the 10th Chapter. Totally awesome as always.
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Post by tesseracta on Jun 16, 2010 22:45:20 GMT -5
Thanks again, everyone. You're all seriously awesome. I'm slowly adding to my blogroll too. Is it proper ettiquette to tell/ask people when you add them, or can I just put them on mine sneaky-ninja style? I was able to update again a few days earlier than expected, because I have some bug. The bad news though is that most of this was written under the influence of Nyquil/Dayquil. Here is a link: Chapter 11: Jackson obsesses over money and Pauline takes a shower with Thornton Wolff
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Post by tesseracta on Jun 22, 2010 16:10:15 GMT -5
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Post by tesseracta on Jun 27, 2010 20:06:40 GMT -5
Hi. I posted an update. Here is the link: Chapter 13, Pauline attends a business dinnerThis chapter isn't really about business though, its about romantic angst. : P The next update will probably take 7-10 days to post because two important things will happen. : )
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Post by Stacy on Jun 28, 2010 22:51:10 GMT -5
I just add people to my blogroll ninja-style. I loved the new update.
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Post by tesseracta on Jul 2, 2010 4:13:43 GMT -5
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Post by tesseracta on Jul 11, 2010 22:16:53 GMT -5
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Post by Stacy on Jul 16, 2010 8:41:53 GMT -5
Yay! Just finished it - it's awesome. Am writing more detailed comment on the blog.
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Post by tesseracta on Jul 18, 2010 22:27:05 GMT -5
Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Your insight means a lot to me! I actually managed to write an update, although not what I had I had planned. (There is something I'm procrastinating doing. I'll do it next update, promise. ). Anyways here is the link to the lastest update: Chapter 16: Pauline plays matchmaker
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Post by moondaisy on Jul 19, 2010 18:03:34 GMT -5
Highly entertaining and written beautifully. All your illustrations are wonderful, but the last picture was exquisitely well matched.
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Post by tesseracta on Jul 24, 2010 5:21:08 GMT -5
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Post by moondaisy on Jul 24, 2010 15:43:44 GMT -5
Hi, Tess Did you procrastinate because Pauline and Jackson are taking such a big step (forward), or because you found it difficult to write? I did not mind the wait, because this chapter is superbly written and illustrated. You really make this a very special legacy!
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Post by tesseracta on Jul 25, 2010 13:28:49 GMT -5
I procrastinated for both reasons. : ( *semi-spoilery* It was a big step, and unpleasant, and now they are in a different place. I also found it very hard to write. I'm unhappy about some awkwardness with staging (easedropping on a phone call) and info dumping (Pauline's explanation), but I didn't know how to present it otherwise. I also think I'm stretching suspension of disbelief a bit much in a few places too. I'd be happy for suggestions for improvement for academic reasons. I'm also uncomfortable about kissy stuff. I wanted to make it meaningful, but not barf-inducing. To research, I read and re-read other's romantic stories and irl experiences, which was kind of fun. I very much admire how you handle this subject, Moondaisy. Your love scenes are romantic and mysterious, but not overwrought. Ilyandria who I just found, does this well too. My favorite Sims 3 story kiss so far, is a certain one that Raquelroden wrote about. I'm sure there are more too, but I'm still behind in catching up on stories. *sigh* I'm soooo glad its over though, lol.
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Post by moondaisy on Jul 28, 2010 20:38:28 GMT -5
Aw! Tess, this is probably the hardest thing to do for you until you feel comfortable with your lovely characters doing it! It seems like sometimes there are too many moral issues (you with eavesdropping, me with swiping stuff) but Stacy was right when she said none of it should not hold us back. We are writers and "observers" in the first place... right?
I loved your romantic version of events just as much as I did Rachel's with Ed or Illandrya's. You created an atmosphere and carried it through. The excitement and fun was there as well as a slightly deflated feeling the next morning. Very fragile, but with all bridges intactt! All's realistic in this episode ans so what if it was not...? Please write more of the same stuff - you are good at it! You are brillliant. (no smilie because I don't want you to think I'm joking!)
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Post by tesseracta on Aug 1, 2010 17:19:44 GMT -5
Thanks Moondaisy. That means so much coming from you! Anyways, I was able to write a romantically angst-less update, where we see Jackson try to forget about his romantic woes in Egypt. Chapter 18: Jackson becomes a flunky
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