Alyssa Richards

[sfe]

Hey guys, I'm Sfe!

I have been reading stories for a while, but I've never been particularly active, apart from commenting to some of my favorite blogs every now and then. I have decided to start a new story blog, Alyssa Richards. It is something between adventure and mystery.




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Description:
Alyssa, is a simple girl whose curiosity will bring her face to face with a very mysterious adventure. Everything started with an innocent trip to Egypt.

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I would really like it if you would stop by and leave a comment. Constructive critisism is appreciated: In fact, it would help me understand whether it's worth it to keep on writing or not

Thank you very much!

[celebkiriedhel]

A great start - you've captured some really interesting faces, in your pictures. The only criticism I would make, is that Ray never says the main character's name. We need it at least once, to know that this is Alyssa.

[sfe]

Thank you so much Kiri!

You have a good point, I should definitely make Ray mention her name at least once. It is just that since she's the narrator of the story, I thought it would be clear who she is.

Thank you again for taking the time to read and comment. It's very important to me

[drew]

Left a comment at your blog, I was pulled in immediately, well done! I am all for adventure, bring it on~

[sfe]

Hi illandrya!

I never count the days to my leave either (31 whole days left for me, yikes), hehehe.

I love all of your stories, so it'd be very important to me if you read mine and perhaps tell me what you think

[mmmcheezy225]

Love it! I'll be watching for updates.

[sfe]

Thank you mmmcheezy!!

Chapter 2 is now up! You can find it here:
sfestories.wordpress.com/2010/12/03/part-2-dream-turned-to-nightmare/

At first, part 2 was larger but decided to cut it in two. So now I feel it's too small but it was the best place to end it I think. Comments highly appreciated

[mmmcheezy225]

Wow, I wonder what happened to Ray? Something tells me the pyramid is cursed, either that or the security guards have very powerful tasers.

Also, kind of random, but this sentence really stood out to me:

"A scent of mould mixed with sand penetrated my nostrils and it evoked images of ancient Egyptian myths into my head."

It's so descriptive, and very poetic.

[sfe]

Hehe, maybe... who knows?

Thank you very much cheezy

[sb]

Chapter 2 was wonderful! No matter what's happening, looks like it's happening to both of them. Really evocative writing.

[sfe]

Oh, sb I hadn't noticed your reply. Thank you so much

Part 3 is up!

Read what Alyssa did for the rest of her "holidays".

(heh, it's not exactly so shocking but I just love this smiley! I had to use it!)

[sfe]

Part 4 is out.

This part is different than the previous. I'm hoping it won't be like reading an entirely different story, lol ;D

[sfe]

Hello again.

There's a new part out in Alyssa Richards mystery.

Part 5 : Rewinding memories